My dad’s car.
The piece I would like to revise is my Haiku and my paragraph about my dad’s car.
A genre is a short story. It’s about my dad letting me drive his mustang out in Letcher. When I tried to start it I was so pumped because I wanted to go fast but I relised that I let my foot of the clutch so I had to restarted it and we were off. Its an unforgetting story that i'll never forget. Its a time when my dad and me spent the greatest time for a joy ride.
It’s about my dad who let me drive his car for the first time and what I did and were I’ve driven to. At first I really didn’t get to know how the stick shift was tuned on it because it was my first time. On my dad’s truck, I know the stick shift on that really well. The car is more high racing tuned, my dad’s truck is more off road tuned.
My ideas all come from my family and what we have done in the past. This story of my life was one of my favorite times in my life.This story came from me driving his car over the summer to help with his back surgery because I didn't want to make him walk a mile to get to his car. Thats really the only thing I thought about all the time besides school work.
How I would change this is I would read over and over again and just make it perfect because I got like a 90 somthing on it and I was shooting for a 100. Also I don't think I had to many awubis sentences in my paragraph.
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